There is only the ocean;
waves, tide, surf
are simply parts
of the whole.
I used to build sandcastles
close enough to seashore
that they’d wash away, clean
before I got attached.
I manufactured moats
drawbridges and gates
spiral towers to hide treasures
keeping intruders at bay.
I never did need knights
as much as I told myself I did
I was a fine protector
a kind ruler over myself
but you were like gills
and I breathed new air
the salt of the sea
the grit of the sand
and I decided I’d move
my sandcastle away
from that rising tide
and invite you in, too.
This is such a beautiful work, great poem elle
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Elle, building sand castles and living them as a youngster and then moving to adulthood and keeping the castles with you is every little person’s dream. You’ve written a poem that will capture the hearts of everyone. I love the poem. Stan
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Sweet poetry
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Really lovely. This sentence is really powerful– “clean
before I got attached,”– as it is not only inviting of nostalgia but also of the consistency of events.
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Absolutely beautiful Elle!😊 ❤️
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Such a simple, clean, and beautiful poem: like wave-soaked sand grains sparkling in the sun.
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Fabulous!
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What a beautiful metaphor! The entire poem is very well structured—no accidental rhymes to set up false pattern expectance, no fixed meter (that I picked up on) but still a very natural flow.
I’m looking forward to reading through more of your work now.
Cheers,
~ Adeline
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Beautiful poem. Your words create genuine images.
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Lovely!
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Excellent
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